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Thesis Statements

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This handout describes what a thesis statement is, how thesis statements work in your writing, and how you can craft or refine one for your draft.

Introduction

Writing in college often takes the form of persuasion—convincing others that you have an interesting, logical point of view on the subject you are studying. Persuasion is a skill you practice regularly in your daily life. You persuade your roommate to clean up, your parents to let you borrow the car, your friend to vote for your favorite candidate or policy. In college, course assignments often ask you to make a persuasive case in writing. You are asked to convince your reader of your point of view. This form of persuasion, often called academic argument, follows a predictable pattern in writing. After a brief introduction of your topic, you state your point of view on the topic directly and often in one sentence. This sentence is the thesis statement, and it serves as a summary of the argument you’ll make in the rest of your paper.

What is a thesis statement?

A thesis statement:

  • tells the reader how you will interpret the significance of the subject matter under discussion.
  • is a road map for the paper; in other words, it tells the reader what to expect from the rest of the paper.
  • directly answers the question asked of you. A thesis is an interpretation of a question or subject, not the subject itself. The subject, or topic, of an essay might be World War II or Moby Dick; a thesis must then offer a way to understand the war or the novel.
  • makes a claim that others might dispute.
  • is usually a single sentence near the beginning of your paper (most often, at the end of the first paragraph) that presents your argument to the reader. The rest of the paper, the body of the essay, gathers and organizes evidence that will persuade the reader of the logic of your interpretation.

If your assignment asks you to take a position or develop a claim about a subject, you may need to convey that position or claim in a thesis statement near the beginning of your draft. The assignment may not explicitly state that you need a thesis statement because your instructor may assume you will include one. When in doubt, ask your instructor if the assignment requires a thesis statement. When an assignment asks you to analyze, to interpret, to compare and contrast, to demonstrate cause and effect, or to take a stand on an issue, it is likely that you are being asked to develop a thesis and to support it persuasively. (Check out our handout on understanding assignments for more information.)

How do I create a thesis?

A thesis is the result of a lengthy thinking process. Formulating a thesis is not the first thing you do after reading an essay assignment. Before you develop an argument on any topic, you have to collect and organize evidence, look for possible relationships between known facts (such as surprising contrasts or similarities), and think about the significance of these relationships. Once you do this thinking, you will probably have a “working thesis” that presents a basic or main idea and an argument that you think you can support with evidence. Both the argument and your thesis are likely to need adjustment along the way.

Writers use all kinds of techniques to stimulate their thinking and to help them clarify relationships or comprehend the broader significance of a topic and arrive at a thesis statement. For more ideas on how to get started, see our handout on brainstorming .

How do I know if my thesis is strong?

If there’s time, run it by your instructor or make an appointment at the Writing Center to get some feedback. Even if you do not have time to get advice elsewhere, you can do some thesis evaluation of your own. When reviewing your first draft and its working thesis, ask yourself the following :

  • Do I answer the question? Re-reading the question prompt after constructing a working thesis can help you fix an argument that misses the focus of the question. If the prompt isn’t phrased as a question, try to rephrase it. For example, “Discuss the effect of X on Y” can be rephrased as “What is the effect of X on Y?”
  • Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? If your thesis simply states facts that no one would, or even could, disagree with, it’s possible that you are simply providing a summary, rather than making an argument.
  • Is my thesis statement specific enough? Thesis statements that are too vague often do not have a strong argument. If your thesis contains words like “good” or “successful,” see if you could be more specific: why is something “good”; what specifically makes something “successful”?
  • Does my thesis pass the “So what?” test? If a reader’s first response is likely to  be “So what?” then you need to clarify, to forge a relationship, or to connect to a larger issue.
  • Does my essay support my thesis specifically and without wandering? If your thesis and the body of your essay do not seem to go together, one of them has to change. It’s okay to change your working thesis to reflect things you have figured out in the course of writing your paper. Remember, always reassess and revise your writing as necessary.
  • Does my thesis pass the “how and why?” test? If a reader’s first response is “how?” or “why?” your thesis may be too open-ended and lack guidance for the reader. See what you can add to give the reader a better take on your position right from the beginning.

Suppose you are taking a course on contemporary communication, and the instructor hands out the following essay assignment: “Discuss the impact of social media on public awareness.” Looking back at your notes, you might start with this working thesis:

Social media impacts public awareness in both positive and negative ways.

You can use the questions above to help you revise this general statement into a stronger thesis.

  • Do I answer the question? You can analyze this if you rephrase “discuss the impact” as “what is the impact?” This way, you can see that you’ve answered the question only very generally with the vague “positive and negative ways.”
  • Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? Not likely. Only people who maintain that social media has a solely positive or solely negative impact could disagree.
  • Is my thesis statement specific enough? No. What are the positive effects? What are the negative effects?
  • Does my thesis pass the “how and why?” test? No. Why are they positive? How are they positive? What are their causes? Why are they negative? How are they negative? What are their causes?
  • Does my thesis pass the “So what?” test? No. Why should anyone care about the positive and/or negative impact of social media?

After thinking about your answers to these questions, you decide to focus on the one impact you feel strongly about and have strong evidence for:

Because not every voice on social media is reliable, people have become much more critical consumers of information, and thus, more informed voters.

This version is a much stronger thesis! It answers the question, takes a specific position that others can challenge, and it gives a sense of why it matters.

Let’s try another. Suppose your literature professor hands out the following assignment in a class on the American novel: Write an analysis of some aspect of Mark Twain’s novel Huckleberry Finn. “This will be easy,” you think. “I loved Huckleberry Finn!” You grab a pad of paper and write:

Mark Twain’s Huckleberry Finn is a great American novel.

You begin to analyze your thesis:

  • Do I answer the question? No. The prompt asks you to analyze some aspect of the novel. Your working thesis is a statement of general appreciation for the entire novel.

Think about aspects of the novel that are important to its structure or meaning—for example, the role of storytelling, the contrasting scenes between the shore and the river, or the relationships between adults and children. Now you write:

In Huckleberry Finn, Mark Twain develops a contrast between life on the river and life on the shore.
  • Do I answer the question? Yes!
  • Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? Not really. This contrast is well-known and accepted.
  • Is my thesis statement specific enough? It’s getting there–you have highlighted an important aspect of the novel for investigation. However, it’s still not clear what your analysis will reveal.
  • Does my thesis pass the “how and why?” test? Not yet. Compare scenes from the book and see what you discover. Free write, make lists, jot down Huck’s actions and reactions and anything else that seems interesting.
  • Does my thesis pass the “So what?” test? What’s the point of this contrast? What does it signify?”

After examining the evidence and considering your own insights, you write:

Through its contrasting river and shore scenes, Twain’s Huckleberry Finn suggests that to find the true expression of American democratic ideals, one must leave “civilized” society and go back to nature.

This final thesis statement presents an interpretation of a literary work based on an analysis of its content. Of course, for the essay itself to be successful, you must now present evidence from the novel that will convince the reader of your interpretation.

Works consulted

We consulted these works while writing this handout. This is not a comprehensive list of resources on the handout’s topic, and we encourage you to do your own research to find additional publications. Please do not use this list as a model for the format of your own reference list, as it may not match the citation style you are using. For guidance on formatting citations, please see the UNC Libraries citation tutorial . We revise these tips periodically and welcome feedback.

Anson, Chris M., and Robert A. Schwegler. 2010. The Longman Handbook for Writers and Readers , 6th ed. New York: Longman.

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What is a thesis statement?

Is a thesis statement a question, how do you write a good thesis statement, how do i know if my thesis statement is good, examples of thesis statements, helpful resources on how to write a thesis statement, frequently asked questions about writing a thesis statement, related articles.

A thesis statement is the main argument of your paper or thesis.

The thesis statement is one of the most important elements of any piece of academic writing . It is a brief statement of your paper’s main argument. Essentially, you are stating what you will be writing about.

You can see your thesis statement as an answer to a question. While it also contains the question, it should really give an answer to the question with new information and not just restate or reiterate it.

Your thesis statement is part of your introduction. Learn more about how to write a good thesis introduction in our introduction guide .

A thesis statement is not a question. A statement must be arguable and provable through evidence and analysis. While your thesis might stem from a research question, it should be in the form of a statement.

Tip: A thesis statement is typically 1-2 sentences. For a longer project like a thesis, the statement may be several sentences or a paragraph.

A good thesis statement needs to do the following:

  • Condense the main idea of your thesis into one or two sentences.
  • Answer your project’s main research question.
  • Clearly state your position in relation to the topic .
  • Make an argument that requires support or evidence.

Once you have written down a thesis statement, check if it fulfills the following criteria:

  • Your statement needs to be provable by evidence. As an argument, a thesis statement needs to be debatable.
  • Your statement needs to be precise. Do not give away too much information in the thesis statement and do not load it with unnecessary information.
  • Your statement cannot say that one solution is simply right or simply wrong as a matter of fact. You should draw upon verified facts to persuade the reader of your solution, but you cannot just declare something as right or wrong.

As previously mentioned, your thesis statement should answer a question.

If the question is:

What do you think the City of New York should do to reduce traffic congestion?

A good thesis statement restates the question and answers it:

In this paper, I will argue that the City of New York should focus on providing exclusive lanes for public transport and adaptive traffic signals to reduce traffic congestion by the year 2035.

Here is another example. If the question is:

How can we end poverty?

A good thesis statement should give more than one solution to the problem in question:

In this paper, I will argue that introducing universal basic income can help reduce poverty and positively impact the way we work.

  • The Writing Center of the University of North Carolina has a list of questions to ask to see if your thesis is strong .

A thesis statement is part of the introduction of your paper. It is usually found in the first or second paragraph to let the reader know your research purpose from the beginning.

In general, a thesis statement should have one or two sentences. But the length really depends on the overall length of your project. Take a look at our guide about the length of thesis statements for more insight on this topic.

Here is a list of Thesis Statement Examples that will help you understand better how to write them.

Every good essay should include a thesis statement as part of its introduction, no matter the academic level. Of course, if you are a high school student you are not expected to have the same type of thesis as a PhD student.

Here is a great YouTube tutorial showing How To Write An Essay: Thesis Statements .

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How to write a thesis statement, what is a thesis statement.

Almost all of us—even if we don’t do it consciously—look early in an essay for a one- or two-sentence condensation of the argument or analysis that is to follow. We refer to that condensation as a thesis statement.

Why Should Your Essay Contain a Thesis Statement?

  • to test your ideas by distilling them into a sentence or two
  • to better organize and develop your argument
  • to provide your reader with a “guide” to your argument

In general, your thesis statement will accomplish these goals if you think of the thesis as the answer to the question your paper explores.

How Can You Write a Good Thesis Statement?

Here are some helpful hints to get you started. You can either scroll down or select a link to a specific topic.

How to Generate a Thesis Statement if the Topic is Assigned How to Generate a Thesis Statement if the Topic is not Assigned How to Tell a Strong Thesis Statement from a Weak One

How to Generate a Thesis Statement if the Topic is Assigned

Almost all assignments, no matter how complicated, can be reduced to a single question. Your first step, then, is to distill the assignment into a specific question. For example, if your assignment is, “Write a report to the local school board explaining the potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class,” turn the request into a question like, “What are the potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class?” After you’ve chosen the question your essay will answer, compose one or two complete sentences answering that question.

Q: “What are the potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class?” A: “The potential benefits of using computers in a fourth-grade class are . . .”
A: “Using computers in a fourth-grade class promises to improve . . .”

The answer to the question is the thesis statement for the essay.

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How to Generate a Thesis Statement if the Topic is not Assigned

Even if your assignment doesn’t ask a specific question, your thesis statement still needs to answer a question about the issue you’d like to explore. In this situation, your job is to figure out what question you’d like to write about.

A good thesis statement will usually include the following four attributes:

  • take on a subject upon which reasonable people could disagree
  • deal with a subject that can be adequately treated given the nature of the assignment
  • express one main idea
  • assert your conclusions about a subject

Let’s see how to generate a thesis statement for a social policy paper.

Brainstorm the topic . Let’s say that your class focuses upon the problems posed by changes in the dietary habits of Americans. You find that you are interested in the amount of sugar Americans consume.

You start out with a thesis statement like this:

Sugar consumption.

This fragment isn’t a thesis statement. Instead, it simply indicates a general subject. Furthermore, your reader doesn’t know what you want to say about sugar consumption.

Narrow the topic . Your readings about the topic, however, have led you to the conclusion that elementary school children are consuming far more sugar than is healthy.

You change your thesis to look like this:

Reducing sugar consumption by elementary school children.

This fragment not only announces your subject, but it focuses on one segment of the population: elementary school children. Furthermore, it raises a subject upon which reasonable people could disagree, because while most people might agree that children consume more sugar than they used to, not everyone would agree on what should be done or who should do it. You should note that this fragment is not a thesis statement because your reader doesn’t know your conclusions on the topic.

Take a position on the topic. After reflecting on the topic a little while longer, you decide that what you really want to say about this topic is that something should be done to reduce the amount of sugar these children consume.

You revise your thesis statement to look like this:

More attention should be paid to the food and beverage choices available to elementary school children.

This statement asserts your position, but the terms more attention and food and beverage choices are vague.

Use specific language . You decide to explain what you mean about food and beverage choices , so you write:

Experts estimate that half of elementary school children consume nine times the recommended daily allowance of sugar.

This statement is specific, but it isn’t a thesis. It merely reports a statistic instead of making an assertion.

Make an assertion based on clearly stated support. You finally revise your thesis statement one more time to look like this:

Because half of all American elementary school children consume nine times the recommended daily allowance of sugar, schools should be required to replace the beverages in soda machines with healthy alternatives.

Notice how the thesis answers the question, “What should be done to reduce sugar consumption by children, and who should do it?” When you started thinking about the paper, you may not have had a specific question in mind, but as you became more involved in the topic, your ideas became more specific. Your thesis changed to reflect your new insights.

How to Tell a Strong Thesis Statement from a Weak One

1. a strong thesis statement takes some sort of stand..

Remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a subject. For example, if you are writing a paper for a class on fitness, you might be asked to choose a popular weight-loss product to evaluate. Here are two thesis statements:

There are some negative and positive aspects to the Banana Herb Tea Supplement.

This is a weak thesis statement. First, it fails to take a stand. Second, the phrase negative and positive aspects is vague.

Because Banana Herb Tea Supplement promotes rapid weight loss that results in the loss of muscle and lean body mass, it poses a potential danger to customers.

This is a strong thesis because it takes a stand, and because it's specific.

2. A strong thesis statement justifies discussion.

Your thesis should indicate the point of the discussion. If your assignment is to write a paper on kinship systems, using your own family as an example, you might come up with either of these two thesis statements:

My family is an extended family.

This is a weak thesis because it merely states an observation. Your reader won’t be able to tell the point of the statement, and will probably stop reading.

While most American families would view consanguineal marriage as a threat to the nuclear family structure, many Iranian families, like my own, believe that these marriages help reinforce kinship ties in an extended family.

This is a strong thesis because it shows how your experience contradicts a widely-accepted view. A good strategy for creating a strong thesis is to show that the topic is controversial. Readers will be interested in reading the rest of the essay to see how you support your point.

3. A strong thesis statement expresses one main idea.

Readers need to be able to see that your paper has one main point. If your thesis statement expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse your readers about the subject of your paper. For example:

Companies need to exploit the marketing potential of the Internet, and Web pages can provide both advertising and customer support.

This is a weak thesis statement because the reader can’t decide whether the paper is about marketing on the Internet or Web pages. To revise the thesis, the relationship between the two ideas needs to become more clear. One way to revise the thesis would be to write:

Because the Internet is filled with tremendous marketing potential, companies should exploit this potential by using Web pages that offer both advertising and customer support.

This is a strong thesis because it shows that the two ideas are related. Hint: a great many clear and engaging thesis statements contain words like because , since , so , although , unless , and however .

4. A strong thesis statement is specific.

A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about, and will help you keep your paper to a manageable topic. For example, if you're writing a seven-to-ten page paper on hunger, you might say:

World hunger has many causes and effects.

This is a weak thesis statement for two major reasons. First, world hunger can’t be discussed thoroughly in seven to ten pages. Second, many causes and effects is vague. You should be able to identify specific causes and effects. A revised thesis might look like this:

Hunger persists in Glandelinia because jobs are scarce and farming in the infertile soil is rarely profitable.

This is a strong thesis statement because it narrows the subject to a more specific and manageable topic, and it also identifies the specific causes for the existence of hunger.

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Writing a paper: thesis statements, basics of thesis statements.

The thesis statement is the brief articulation of your paper's central argument and purpose. You might hear it referred to as simply a "thesis." Every scholarly paper should have a thesis statement, and strong thesis statements are concise, specific, and arguable. Concise means the thesis is short: perhaps one or two sentences for a shorter paper. Specific means the thesis deals with a narrow and focused topic, appropriate to the paper's length. Arguable means that a scholar in your field could disagree (or perhaps already has!).

Strong thesis statements address specific intellectual questions, have clear positions, and use a structure that reflects the overall structure of the paper. Read on to learn more about constructing a strong thesis statement.

Being Specific

This thesis statement has no specific argument:

Needs Improvement: In this essay, I will examine two scholarly articles to find similarities and differences.

This statement is concise, but it is neither specific nor arguable—a reader might wonder, "Which scholarly articles? What is the topic of this paper? What field is the author writing in?" Additionally, the purpose of the paper—to "examine…to find similarities and differences" is not of a scholarly level. Identifying similarities and differences is a good first step, but strong academic argument goes further, analyzing what those similarities and differences might mean or imply.

Better: In this essay, I will argue that Bowler's (2003) autocratic management style, when coupled with Smith's (2007) theory of social cognition, can reduce the expenses associated with employee turnover.

The new revision here is still concise, as well as specific and arguable.  We can see that it is specific because the writer is mentioning (a) concrete ideas and (b) exact authors.  We can also gather the field (business) and the topic (management and employee turnover). The statement is arguable because the student goes beyond merely comparing; he or she draws conclusions from that comparison ("can reduce the expenses associated with employee turnover").

Making a Unique Argument

This thesis draft repeats the language of the writing prompt without making a unique argument:

Needs Improvement: The purpose of this essay is to monitor, assess, and evaluate an educational program for its strengths and weaknesses. Then, I will provide suggestions for improvement.

You can see here that the student has simply stated the paper's assignment, without articulating specifically how he or she will address it. The student can correct this error simply by phrasing the thesis statement as a specific answer to the assignment prompt.

Better: Through a series of student interviews, I found that Kennedy High School's antibullying program was ineffective. In order to address issues of conflict between students, I argue that Kennedy High School should embrace policies outlined by the California Department of Education (2010).

Words like "ineffective" and "argue" show here that the student has clearly thought through the assignment and analyzed the material; he or she is putting forth a specific and debatable position. The concrete information ("student interviews," "antibullying") further prepares the reader for the body of the paper and demonstrates how the student has addressed the assignment prompt without just restating that language.

Creating a Debate

This thesis statement includes only obvious fact or plot summary instead of argument:

Needs Improvement: Leadership is an important quality in nurse educators.

A good strategy to determine if your thesis statement is too broad (and therefore, not arguable) is to ask yourself, "Would a scholar in my field disagree with this point?" Here, we can see easily that no scholar is likely to argue that leadership is an unimportant quality in nurse educators.  The student needs to come up with a more arguable claim, and probably a narrower one; remember that a short paper needs a more focused topic than a dissertation.

Better: Roderick's (2009) theory of participatory leadership  is particularly appropriate to nurse educators working within the emergency medicine field, where students benefit most from collegial and kinesthetic learning.

Here, the student has identified a particular type of leadership ("participatory leadership"), narrowing the topic, and has made an arguable claim (this type of leadership is "appropriate" to a specific type of nurse educator). Conceivably, a scholar in the nursing field might disagree with this approach. The student's paper can now proceed, providing specific pieces of evidence to support the arguable central claim.

Choosing the Right Words

This thesis statement uses large or scholarly-sounding words that have no real substance:

Needs Improvement: Scholars should work to seize metacognitive outcomes by harnessing discipline-based networks to empower collaborative infrastructures.

There are many words in this sentence that may be buzzwords in the student's field or key terms taken from other texts, but together they do not communicate a clear, specific meaning. Sometimes students think scholarly writing means constructing complex sentences using special language, but actually it's usually a stronger choice to write clear, simple sentences. When in doubt, remember that your ideas should be complex, not your sentence structure.

Better: Ecologists should work to educate the U.S. public on conservation methods by making use of local and national green organizations to create a widespread communication plan.

Notice in the revision that the field is now clear (ecology), and the language has been made much more field-specific ("conservation methods," "green organizations"), so the reader is able to see concretely the ideas the student is communicating.

Leaving Room for Discussion

This thesis statement is not capable of development or advancement in the paper:

Needs Improvement: There are always alternatives to illegal drug use.

This sample thesis statement makes a claim, but it is not a claim that will sustain extended discussion. This claim is the type of claim that might be appropriate for the conclusion of a paper, but in the beginning of the paper, the student is left with nowhere to go. What further points can be made? If there are "always alternatives" to the problem the student is identifying, then why bother developing a paper around that claim? Ideally, a thesis statement should be complex enough to explore over the length of the entire paper.

Better: The most effective treatment plan for methamphetamine addiction may be a combination of pharmacological and cognitive therapy, as argued by Baker (2008), Smith (2009), and Xavier (2011).

In the revised thesis, you can see the student make a specific, debatable claim that has the potential to generate several pages' worth of discussion. When drafting a thesis statement, think about the questions your thesis statement will generate: What follow-up inquiries might a reader have? In the first example, there are almost no additional questions implied, but the revised example allows for a good deal more exploration.

Thesis Mad Libs

If you are having trouble getting started, try using the models below to generate a rough model of a thesis statement! These models are intended for drafting purposes only and should not appear in your final work.

  • In this essay, I argue ____, using ______ to assert _____.
  • While scholars have often argued ______, I argue______, because_______.
  • Through an analysis of ______, I argue ______, which is important because_______.

Words to Avoid and to Embrace

When drafting your thesis statement, avoid words like explore, investigate, learn, compile, summarize , and explain to describe the main purpose of your paper. These words imply a paper that summarizes or "reports," rather than synthesizing and analyzing.

Instead of the terms above, try words like argue, critique, question , and interrogate . These more analytical words may help you begin strongly, by articulating a specific, critical, scholarly position.

Read Kayla's blog post for tips on taking a stand in a well-crafted thesis statement.

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Thesis and Purpose Statements

Use the guidelines below to learn the differences between thesis and purpose statements.

In the first stages of writing, thesis or purpose statements are usually rough or ill-formed and are useful primarily as planning tools.

A thesis statement or purpose statement will emerge as you think and write about a topic. The statement can be restricted or clarified and eventually worked into an introduction.

As you revise your paper, try to phrase your thesis or purpose statement in a precise way so that it matches the content and organization of your paper.

Thesis statements

A thesis statement is a sentence that makes an assertion about a topic and predicts how the topic will be developed. It does not simply announce a topic: it says something about the topic.

Good: X has made a significant impact on the teenage population due to its . . . Bad: In this paper, I will discuss X.

A thesis statement makes a promise to the reader about the scope, purpose, and direction of the paper. It summarizes the conclusions that the writer has reached about the topic.

A thesis statement is generally located near the end of the introduction. Sometimes in a long paper, the thesis will be expressed in several sentences or an entire paragraph.

A thesis statement is focused and specific enough to be proven within the boundaries of the paper. Key words (nouns and verbs) should be specific, accurate, and indicative of the range of research, thrust of the argument or analysis, and the organization of supporting information.

Purpose statements

A purpose statement announces the purpose, scope, and direction of the paper. It tells the reader what to expect in a paper and what the specific focus will be.

Common beginnings include:

“This paper examines . . .,” “The aim of this paper is to . . .,” and “The purpose of this essay is to . . .”

A purpose statement makes a promise to the reader about the development of the argument but does not preview the particular conclusions that the writer has drawn.

A purpose statement usually appears toward the end of the introduction. The purpose statement may be expressed in several sentences or even an entire paragraph.

A purpose statement is specific enough to satisfy the requirements of the assignment. Purpose statements are common in research papers in some academic disciplines, while in other disciplines they are considered too blunt or direct. If you are unsure about using a purpose statement, ask your instructor.

This paper will examine the ecological destruction of the Sahel preceding the drought and the causes of this disintegration of the land. The focus will be on the economic, political, and social relationships which brought about the environmental problems in the Sahel.

Sample purpose and thesis statements

The following example combines a purpose statement and a thesis statement (bold).

The goal of this paper is to examine the effects of Chile’s agrarian reform on the lives of rural peasants. The nature of the topic dictates the use of both a chronological and a comparative analysis of peasant lives at various points during the reform period. . . The Chilean reform example provides evidence that land distribution is an essential component of both the improvement of peasant conditions and the development of a democratic society. More extensive and enduring reforms would likely have allowed Chile the opportunity to further expand these horizons.

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A thesis is a special kind of research paper that you do at the end of your master's program or as a final project for your bachelor's degree. 

Writing a thesis can be a daunting task for many students. Especially if they're new to academic research or have limited experience with long-form writing, but with the right approach, it doesn't have to be stressful.

In this blog, we'll explore thesis writing in research methodology. We will provide you with expert advice, step-by-step guidance, and proven strategies to help you excel. Whether you're just getting started or looking to refine your skills, you'll find valuable insights to help you write an effective thesis.

So, let's dive in!

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Thesis Writing Vs. Thesis Statement 

We often mix up the terms "thesis" and " thesis statement ," but they're actually two separate things in academic writing.

A thesis statement is a brief summary found in the introduction of an essay, typically one or two sentences, outlining the key points of the academic paper.

On the other hand, a thesis is an extensive academic document that requires more than a full semester to complete. It is a mandatory component for Master's programs and is occasionally necessary for the fulfillment of a bachelor's degree in liberal arts colleges. 

The thesis involves in-depth research and serves as a comprehensive showcase of a student's understanding of a particular subject.

How Long Should a Thesis Be?

We often hear that the length of a thesis varies from project to project. However, it also largely depends on your university department and field of study. 

A bachelor's thesis typically consists of 5000-7000 words, while a master's thesis consists of 9000-10,000 words.

However, a PhD thesis should be written in less than 80,000 words, which are roughly 250-200 pages long.

For the sake of brevity, it is necessary to avoid including unnecessary and repetitive information. Remember that these pages contain all the text and referencing lists except appendices.

How To Structure a Thesis?

The thesis format involves careful consideration of various elements. The final layout is dependent on various factors such as discipline, topic, and theoretical approach. 

The thesis writing format can broadly vary, but here are the four main sections:

Check out the following template to understand better.

Thesis Writing Template

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How to Start a Thesis Writing?

Let's break down the thesis writing process into smaller, manageable steps that can make the process less overwhelming.

Here are some thesis writing steps to help you get started on your journey:

Choose a Topic

Select a topic that aligns with your interests and academic goals. 

Consider its relevance, feasibility, and the availability of research materials. Consult with your advisor or professors to ensure your chosen topic is appropriate for your field of study.

Conduct Preliminary Research

Familiarize yourself with existing literature related to your topic. 

Read scholarly articles, books, and other relevant sources to gain a comprehensive understanding of the subject area. This will help you identify research gaps and develop a strong research question.

Develop a Research Question Or Objective

Formulate a clear research question or objective that will guide your thesis and generate a hypothesis . It should be specific, focused, and capable of being answered or achieved through research. This will serve as the foundation for your entire thesis.

Create a Thesis Proposal

Write a thesis proposal outlining your research objectives, methodology, and expected outcomes. This document will help you communicate your research plan to your advisor and receive valuable feedback before diving into the actual writing process.

Outline your Thesis

Develop a structured outline that organizes your thoughts and establishes a logical flow for your thesis. Identify key sections, such as the introduction, literature review , methodology, results, discussion, and conclusion. This will serve as a roadmap for your writing process.

How to Write a Thesis?

Writing a thesis involves several key components and stages. Here's a comprehensive guide on how to write a thesis from start to finish:

Begin with a title page that includes:

  • Full Title: Clearly state the title of your thesis.
  • Your Full Name: Provide your complete name as the author of the thesis.
  • Department: Specify the academic department to which you belong.
  • Institution and Degree Program: Identify your academic institution and the specific degree program you are enrolled in.
  • Submission Date: Mention the date when you are submitting your thesis.

Additionally, consult your university's guidelines for potential inclusions such as student ID, supervisor's name, or the university logo.

Acknowledgments or Preface

The acknowledgments section in a thesis, while optional, allows you to express gratitude to those who supported you. This can include supervisors, friends, and family. 

Alternatively, you may choose to write a preface, offering insights into the motivation behind your thesis. It's common to select either acknowledgments or a preface, not both.

An abstract is a short summary of your thesis. It is typically limited to around 300 words, and it does not include citations. It provides brief insights into your research objectives, methods, results, and conclusions. 

An excellent abstract answers the following questions: 

  • Why did you do this research?
  • What question were you trying to answer? 
  • What methods did you use to do this research? 
  • What are your findings? 
  • How will your research contribute to the field area?

Tip: The ideal time to compose your abstract is after you've concluded your entire thesis.

Table of Contents

Think of the table of contents as a roadmap for your thesis. It's like a list that tells your reader where to find each section, along with the page numbers. This helps them easily move around and find what they're looking for.

Remember to include all the big parts of your thesis in the table of contents, including any extra stuff at the end, like appendices. If you used heading styles (those formatting options like "Heading 1" or "Heading 2" in MS Word) , you can let the computer generate the table of contents automatically.

List of Figures and Tables

While not required, having a list of figures and tables is useful if you've used several in your thesis. This list helps your reader quickly find specific tables and figures in your document. 

In Word, you can easily create this list using the "Insert Caption" feature. Ensure to follow your university's guidelines for any specific requirements regarding the inclusion of a list of figures and tables.

List of Abbreviations

Include a list of abbreviations used in your thesis to help readers understand acronyms and shortened forms. This provides clarity and ensures a smoother reading experience. If you've used specific terms that might be unfamiliar, list them along with their full meanings.

Consider adding a glossary to your thesis, especially if it involves technical or specialized terms. The glossary provides definitions and explanations for terms that may be unfamiliar to your readers, enhancing their understanding of your work.

Thesis Introduction

The thesis introduction is the opening section, setting the stage for your research. It introduces the topic, provides background information, and outlines the objectives of your study. Moreover, it clearly explains the "what, why, and how" of your research in the introduction.

Additionally, the introduction often includes a thesis statement or research question, giving readers an idea of what to expect in the rest of the document.

Literature Review

Conduct a comprehensive literature review to gain a deeper understanding of existing academic work on your topic. This involves carefully selecting relevant sources, evaluating their credibility, and critically assessing each one. 

Look for connections between sources, such as themes, patterns, conflicts, or gaps.

Methodology

The methodology section describes the research methods and techniques you employed in your study. The reader must understand how you gathered information and drew conclusions, ensuring the validity and reliability of your research. 

Common elements that need to be included in a methodology section include:

  • Research Design: Describe the overall plan or strategy for your study, such as experimental design, survey methods, case study, etc.
  • Participants or Subjects: Detail the characteristics of the individuals or entities involved in your study, including any demographic information.
  • Data Collection: Specify the methods used to gather data, whether through surveys, interviews, experiments, observations, or other means.
  • Data Analysis: Explain the techniques employed to analyze the collected data, such as statistical methods, qualitative analysis, or other approaches.
  • Ethical Considerations: Address any ethical concerns related to your research, including participant consent, confidentiality, and other relevant ethical guidelines.

Present the findings of your study based on the methodology you employed in this section. Focus on reporting the outcomes without introducing new arguments or speculations.

Key elements of the results section include:

  • Presentation of Results: Clearly state each relevant result, providing descriptive statistics (e.g., mean, standard deviation) and inferential statistics (e.g., test statistics, p values).
  • Relation to Research Question: Explain how each result is connected to the original research question, demonstrating the significance of your findings.
  • Hypothesis Evaluation: Assess whether your results support or contradict the initial hypotheses, maintaining objectivity in your interpretation.
  • Use of Visual Aids: Include tables and figures if they enhance the reader's understanding of your results. Avoid unnecessary visual elements and only include what is crucial for clarity.

If you have additional data, such as raw numbers or interview transcripts, consider including them in an appendix for interested readers.

Analyze and interpret your results in the context of existing literature. 

Discuss the implications of your findings, highlighting their significance and contribution to the field. Address any limitations or potential areas for further research.

Summarize your main findings and their implications. 

Restate your thesis statement and discuss the overall significance of your study. Reflect on the research process and offer suggestions for future research directions.

The reference list, also known as the bibliography, is a compilation of all the sources cited in your thesis. It provides full details about each reference, allowing readers to locate and verify the sources you used in your research. 

Follow a consistent citation style (e.g., APA, MLA) specified by your academic institution. Make sure to cite the sources correctly. 

Include any supplementary materials such as surveys, interview transcripts, or additional data that support your thesis but are not included in the main body.

Thesis Writing Example

We have put together a brief compilation of examples of theses to assist you in getting started.

  • Example#1: " Do Frameworks Matter? Testing the Framing Effect on Public Support for Prison Pell Grants " by Natalie Miles Burke, Portland State University.
  • Example#2: " The Affective Discourses of Eviction: Right to Counsel in New York City " by Hadley Savana Bates, Portland State University
  • Example#3: " The Impact of Climate Change on Selected PNW Watersheds through the Lens of Western Red Cedar Habitat " byJordan T. Hamann, Portland State University
  • Example#4: " Impacts of Floodplain Restoration on Water Temperature and Macroinvertebrates in Whychus Creek, Oregon " by Wesley Nathan Noone, Portland State University
  • Example#5: " Trump's Legacy in the Middle East: Strategic Shift and the Geopolitics of American Foreign Policy in the Region " by Bilel Kriaa, Portland State University

Take a look at these thesis examples to understand how they're structured and formatted. They can offer helpful ideas for your own thesis writing.

Tips for Effective Thesis Writing

Writing a thesis requires careful planning, organization, and attention to detail. Here are some valuable tips to enhance your thesis writing process and produce a high-quality document:

  • Plan your time wisely: Start early and create a realistic schedule to manage your research, writing, and revisions effectively.
  • Understand the guidelines: Familiarize yourself with the formatting, citation style, and specific requirements set by your institution.
  • Organize your thoughts: Develop a clear and logical structure for your thesis, including sections such as introduction, literature review, methodology, etc. Clear any questions in mind. 
  • Write clearly and concisely: Use precise and concise language to communicate your ideas effectively. Avoid jargon and ensure your writing is accessible to a broader audience.
  • Revise and proofread: Review your thesis multiple times for grammar, spelling, and coherence. Seek feedback from peers or advisors to improve the clarity and quality of your work.
  • Stay organized: Keep track of your sources, data, and any additional materials. Create a system to organize your research findings and citations for easy referencing.
  • Seek guidance and feedback: Consult with your advisor or mentors throughout the process. Their insights and suggestions can enhance the overall quality of your thesis.

To Sum it Up!

Writing a thesis can be a demanding yet rewarding journey that showcases your research skills and intellectual capabilities. By following the tips and guidelines provided in this blog, you can approach thesis writing with confidence.

Remember to start early and maintain a clear and logical structure throughout your thesis.

Seek guidance from advisors and peers, and remain persistent and resilient in the face of challenges.

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Frequently Asked Questions

What is the most important part of thesis writing.

An abstract is the most important part of a thesis. It includes what you are researching, why it matters to society, and how your work will contribute to solving that problem. 

What are the 5 chapters of a thesis?

The main five chapters of the thesis are: 

  • Introduction 
  • Literature review 
  • Methods 
  • Result 
  • Discussion 

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